Jasmine Hart

Hi, I love your use of onomotopoeia here. It really drew me in, and the repetition of sounds builds tension. "Mother said it wouldn't happen" is ominous and the mention ...

Hi, This is lovely. The first couplet instantly drew me in and the poem flows well as a whole. I love the isolation of "alone" on the final line. I ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. It flows nicely and you use language and imagery well. I especially enjoyed: "and cut perfect, smiling gingerbread people " and "with a cup of ...

Hi, This is so beautiful. Your imagery is wonderful and you create a great sense of place. The emotion of the speak comes through nicely without overwhelming the visual effect. ...

Hi, This was a very powerful piece. You put your idea across skillfully. I found this really heart-wrenching. The opening lines instantly drew me in and I loved your use ...

Hi, Usually my advice would be to lose the rhyming pattern and avoid archaic-sounding sentiments ("Do not speak of love, I beg") but honestly I don't feel that this applies ...

Hi, The title really drew me in. I wasn't aware of this quote and found it really interesting. I loved the opening couplet and the final address to Mother Teresa ...

Hi Lava, I really enjoyed this. The title caught my attention. The first four lines were really beautiful and endearing. I'm not sure about "bleed" and "red" - maybe too ...

Hi, This is really beautiful. The title instantly drew me in and the first line was really great. I love the personality which shines through in: "And you can’t listen ...

Hi, This is an interesting slant on a love poem. I really enjoyed: "You capture things that you see- Beautiful beaches, The people you know and love- And share them ...

Hi, This is really beautiful. The tone is perfect, it flows nicely, and the emotion comes across powerfully without obscuring your effective use of language. I especially enjoyed: "Where laughter ...

Hi, This is beautiful and you handle the form skillfully and effectively. Your use of language is great, and the piece flows nicely as a whole. I especially enjoyed "The ...

Hi, I think the rhythm works very nicely here for the most part, and I like how the poem progresses from beginning to end, especially the final line. I'm not ...

Hi, This is an interesting concept. I think that the present tense works very well here - it helps to build tension and make the reader feel closer to the ...

Hi, This was a very interesting piece. I loved the internal rhyme of "dreams streaming" and "wrapped around your ankles." The fourth stanza in particular was great - perfectly concise ...